"Thank you both for your suggestions. I realize it needs a bit of fine tuning.
I think I'll tell you my inspiration for the poem first.
First, my eleven year old son LOVES Godzilla films and has renewed my interest in Kaiju film.
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"I like this. Good ideas and images, although I don't understand the relevance of all of them: "flickering celluloid sound" for eksample.
Dallas is good at the fine-tuning stuff and may have some good suggestions."
A pressing heavy thud does come.An, at first, cacophonousFlocking together of cellsTurns inward and mufflesAgainst its own uranium-colored core,Enormous in its simple violence,A Kaiju darkness, now a flickering celluloid sound."Sound a warning! Thrum the guttural!"It comes. Electric breath, reticulate deathPads the asphalt between the black glassOf office buildings with single fortieth story lights -One solitary pixel of diligence in the night.Silent roars the night, but for the electric buzzOf…See More
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